JHU优秀文书盘点：被招生官认可的文书有什么共性？

JHU盘点优秀文书

随着今年机构文书工作坊和文书一日营陆续圆满收官，大家有没有刷新对申请文书的认知，开始思考起如何写出独特的文书，打动大学呢？

最近约翰霍普金斯大学(JHU)公布了6篇优秀申请文书，并附上了招生官点评。21Fall申请季中，机构的Mavis老师曾在ED申请中斩获JHU的offer，老师在她的录取分享中也真诚地呈现了她写文书时的心路历程，以及她对文书的理解，千万不能错过哦！

这六篇优秀文书里展现的哪些特质吸引了招生官？我们在阅读过后找出了一些线索供大家参考：

1. 应对挑战时的成长和反思

2. 对兴趣爱好的热情和追求

3. 解决问题的能力和战略性、创新性思维

4. 帮助身边的人、为社区贡献一份力量的热心

5. 欣赏他人、团队合作的意识

6. 对世界强烈的好奇心

The Art of Imperfection

BY STELLA

Admissions Committee Comments

In this essay, Stella dives into her journey in the art world and the challenges that came with it. She highlights the joy she found in painting at a young age and the ways this relationship evolved as she grew. Stella shows us how accepting imperfections and being patient allowed her to embrace her craft. She applies these lessons to different settings with new challenges. Her ability to recognize obstacles as opportunities for growth will serve her well at Hopkins, where she will be surrounded by new peers and opportunities and continue to learn in dynamic ways.

Stella在这篇文书中沉浸式回忆了自己在艺术领域的探索历程和遇到的挑战，着重描述自己从幼年起对绘画的热爱以及在成长过程中她与绘画的关系是如何演变的。Stella的文书向我们呈现了学会接受不完美和学会耐心是如何让她逐渐适应创作中的挫折，拥抱看似“不完美”的作品，而她也成功将这种经验运用到了不同场景下遇到的不同挑战中。Stella将阻碍视作成长机会的能力将在她进入JHU之后助她一臂之力。在JHU，她会遇到新的伙伴和新的机遇，继续活力满满地学习下去。

Finding Purpose in Trivial Projects

BY ANJALI

Admissions Committee Comments

Anjali uses her essay to share her experiences with making miniatures. She builds a miniature model of the house she moves into and begins to see the world with greater attention to detail. We see how this passion influences everything she does. Anjali reflects on the joy and patience she developed from making dioramas. This introspection helps the admissions committee see the strategic way she approaches problems and her resilience in the face of challenges. We get a strong sense she will feel at home on our Homewood campus, where our students create solutions using multiple perspectives.

Anjali 在文书中分享了她制作微缩模型的经历。在制作自己新家的微缩模型过程中，她看待世界的方式也逐渐改变，开始变得更加关注细节。我们能感受到对微缩模型的热情是如何影响了她的行为。Anjali 回想了她从制作微缩模型中获得的快乐，和过程中培养起来的耐心，她的反思让招生官看到了她在解决问题时展现出的战略性思维，以及她在面对挑战时的韧性。我们强烈感受到她会在JHU找到归属感，因为JHU的学生善于利用多种视角来解决问题。

Korean Sticky Notes

BY NANCY

Admissions Committee Comments

Nancy’s essay details the responsibilities she had at a young age and her resulting spirit of exploration. She shares memories of supporting her mother through the aisles of H Mart, and we learn about the strategic thinking skills she builds. During these trips, Nancy connects with her Korean identity through her mom’s recollections of her childhood in Seoul and later learning to speak and write Korean. She shows us she is curious and eager to uplift those around her. These qualities will help her thrive on our Homewood campus, where the student community is constantly supporting one another, celebrating different perspectives, and creating spaces of belonging.

Nancy在文书中详细描述了她在年幼时就承担起的家庭责任，和因此激发起的探索精神。她回忆了自己陪母亲逛韩国超市的经历，和母亲逛超市的过程中，Nancy逐渐了解到母亲在首尔的童年生活，加上后来自己学习韩语的经历，逐步构建起她作为韩国人的身份认同。Nancy的经历让我们了解到她从中培养起的战略性思维。在这些经历中她充分展现出了对周边世界的好奇心，和帮助身边人的强烈意愿。这些品质将帮助她在JHU发光发热。在这个校园里，学生们始终互相支持，对不同的视角持开放包容的态度，并致力于营造一个充满归属感的空间。

Being the Handyman

BY SARAH

Admissions Committee Comments

Sarah chronicles her experience as her household “handyman” and the versatility of skills she acquired over the years. As each dilemma arose, from a torn stuffed animal and damaged fence to a broken hook, Sarah learned how to repair it. By taking us through each skill she developed, Sarah shares personal anecdotes that demonstrate her sense of community, service, and family. We see adaptability as she picks up new mediums and an eagerness to learn through hands-on methods. In each of these projects, Sarah also shows the innovation and resourcefulness that can be present in seemingly ordinary tasks. This innate curiosity will be invaluable at Hopkins where students seek new perspectives, ideas, and solutions.

Sarah在文书中讲述了她多年来作为家庭“修理工”的经历和因此掌握的多项技能。每当问题出现，无论是扯坏的毛绒玩具、磨损的围栏，还是坏掉的挂钩，Sarah都自己学着修理、应对他们。通过分享她学习每一项技能的过程，Sarah在她的个人故事中展现了她的社区意识、服务精神和家庭观念。我们看到了她在面对新鲜事物时的适应能力以及在实践中学习的热情。每一个看似平凡的工作背后都展现出Sarah的创新力和智慧。这种与生俱来的好奇心将对她未来在JHU的学习起到非常大的作用，因为这里的学生都在寻找新的视角、想法和解决方案。

To Stand Out or Fit In

BY CAROLINE

Admissions Committee Comments

Caroline’s essay focuses on their experiences developing and accepting their identity. We see how Caroline navigates the challenge of being themself while also trying to fit in with their peers. After reflecting on authenticity and self-love, Caroline better understands who they are and what matters to them. This leads them to dive into their passions and find various communities with shared values and interests—from coding and broadcasting to quantum physics. These experiences, born out of a deeper understanding of their identity, ensured Caroline could have the most meaningful impact on themself and their high school. As we build a class of students at Hopkins, this essay helps us to visualize how Caroline might engage with those around them to make an impact in our community.

Caroline的文书讲述了一个从探索自我到接纳自我的故事。我们能看到Caroline是如何在真实的做自己，和融入同龄人之间寻找平衡的。在经历了对真实性和爱自己这两个问题的自我反思之后，Caroline更好地理解了自己是谁，对她来说什么是最重要的。这种反思让她能够全身心投入到自己的兴趣爱好中，找到与她有着同样价值观念和兴趣的群体——编程、广播和量子物理等等。基于对“自我”更深刻的理解，Caroline丰富多彩的经历为自己和她的高中都带来意义深远的影响。在JHU寻觅新生力量的过程中，这篇文书让我们能够预想到Caroline将会如何与JHU产生连接，在JHU发挥自己的影响力。

A Growing World

BY CALLA

Admissions Committee Comments

Calla highlights her early wonder by dreaming of future expeditions and playing them out in her backyard. As Calla grows, so does her curiosity and ambition. She joins a team of dynamic peers within Science Olympiad. Through these experiences, Calla celebrates the strengths of those around her and realizes the importance of teamwork. She also demonstrates her multifaceted interests, and we can envision her succeeding in an interdisciplinary and collaborative environment like our Homewood campus. This desire to pursue discovery in a community of diverse thinkers aligns with our university’s mission to create knowledge for the world.

Calla的文书里讲述了她在童年时期对未来的畅想（成为一名野外动物学家），以及试图在自家后院让畅想成真的经历，这些正是Calla各种奇思妙想的早期体现。随着Calla的成长，她的好奇心和对世界的探索欲也随之增加。她加入了一个由一群活力满满的同龄人组成的科学奥林匹克竞赛团队。这些经历让Calla不仅懂得了欣赏身边人的长处，也认识到了团队合作的重要性。此外Calla在文中还向我们展示了她广泛的兴趣爱好，我们完全能够想象她在JHU这样一个鼓励跨学科和合作的环境中会取得的成功。Calla渴望在一个充满多元化思维的社群里继续探索追寻，这完美契合了JHU为世界创造知识的理念。