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Dr. Achebe
This week, we are going to discuss companies‘ policies for promotion, companies tend to value different things and set different criteria for determining who deserves a promotion.Criteria for promotion may include employees’ performance and achievements in their current roles, seniority within the company, years of experience in the field, or even leadership potential. In today's post, l would like you to discuss which criteria for promotion you see as the most important and explain why.
同学一:
I believe seniority should be the most important criterion for promotion. Rewarding employees who have been with the company for a long time shows that the company values loyalty and dedication. Long-term employees often have a deep understanding of the company's culture and processes, which can be invaluable.
同学二：
I think job performance should be the top criterion for promotions. Rewarding employees for their skills and achievements pushes them to excel in their roles. When people see that their hard work and dedication are recognized, they're motivated to take the next step in their careers.
审题分析
(1). 这个题目重复了今年7月21日刚考过。工作类，对没有工作过的同学们来说有些难度。但是我们团里有专门推送过-工作类-话题语料，包含了工作常见的职位，工作内容, 工作中的合作, 和工作与生活平衡/健康等相关内容。所以遇到这类题目，团里的同学应该不会陌生。团里也把这个题作为工作语料-的延伸内容，给同学们做day8延伸练习。
2. “员工升职最看重”，对于一个公司来说，主要是看哪个对公司的贡献最大，付出最多。
3. “seniority/loyalty and dedication/a deep understanding of the company's culture and processes"：同学一的内容已经覆盖了很多方面，大家可以同意，并选择使用展开、-- 整体工作时长，证明了对公司的忠诚和付出，值得升职。
举例：他们尽责，不会随意迟到；工作也不需要老板详细解释细节。（写作团day9语料）-- 工作时间长， 说明经验充足, 专业，了解公司的发展，能够应对很多工作上的事项，适合升职。举例, 比如可以更恰当地知道如何跟其他同事讨论/工作，避免冲突；比如可以指导新员工在职培训，比如教会新的销售人员一些有用的技巧和策略。（写作团day8; day9语料）;他们的经验使他们对公司发展更有远见， 让他们更知道如何避免问题，为公司发展助力。（写组团day9的-选做练习范文）--但问题是，如果工作成效不好，难以服众，尤其是年轻员工可能不服。
4. “performance on the job”：--比如工作完成的情况，是否能按照要求高质量完成任务, 是否能够跟其他员工配合合作，是否能投入工作。这些都是一个上级的必要品质。也能服众。
举例：比如我们公司要设计一款电脑。一位年轻的女性员工提出了一个以往大家都忽略的观点.... 设计的电脑非常受欢迎。（改编写作团day9重点讲解的-产品设计-语料）👩🏻🏫：以上思路都是比较好的思路。以上蓝色词汇都可以在写作团day8/day9中找到相关表达。
参考范文:
Echoing …’s perspective, I believe that a company should prioritize an employee’s performance over tenure when considering promotions. This view is rooted in the fact that work performance directly reflects an individual’s contributions to the company and their ability to garner respect among colleagues.（总观点和分论点）
For instance,a Human Resources (HR) manager who successfully recruits highly qualified individuals demonstrates deep insights into the company’s operational needs and a sharp acumen for navigating the volatile job market—qualities essential for leading the HR department.Similarly, a product manager who successfully launches a product that appeal to the target market during an economic downturn clearly shows potential for higher leadership roles, possibly even as aChief Executive Officer (CEO), by consistently steering the company in the right direction.(举例)
While some may argue thatextensive work experience is a solid indicator of an employee’s reliability and expertise, suggesting suitability for promotion, it’s important to recognize that long work years only represent the past, not the future. Given today’s fluctuating market, it is more sensible to place greater emphasis on employees who have demonstrated their capabilities at work.（对比）
In conclusion, were I to set the criteria for job promotions, I would place greater emphasis on an individual’s job performance rather than the length of service.(总结)（205）
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