12.28托福写作范文+分析

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教授

This week's course materials will focus on scientific discoveries. While scientific researchers usuallyprefer to share what theylearn with other scientists, manybusinesses and governments keep certain scientific discoveries secret. Somepeople believe that all scientific discoveries should be shared freely among scientists all around the world and that governments and businesses should not keep any discoveriessecret. What do you believe and why?

Kelly:

I don't think all discoveries should be shared. Businesses. for example, often spend a lot of money on scientific research in order to make a discovery that can lead to profit. Even if that discovery benefits everyone, the business has a right to keep the discovery secret so that it can develop a profitable product from the research.

Paul:

Sharing knowledge is crucially important to most scientists. Scientists usually publish the details of their discoveries in scientific journals, which means that everyone can see what the scientists have accomplished. Being recognized as the person who made a discovery is the biggest reward for any scientist. When scientists keep their discoveries secret, they lose that recognition. That is very unsatisfying.

审题分析

(1). 这道题重复了23年10月22日题目。是一道横跨多年的题目。

第1次老师推送此题的分析时,用的还是SARS的例子。第2次推送的时候,用的是COVID-19/Novel coronavirus新冠病毒。万万没想到,第3次推送的时候,新冠还没结束!第4次推送的时候,终于一切都结束了!

今天是第5次推送,不仅一切都结束,而且疫情好像已经从记忆中抹去了一样。人,果然是善忘。

(2). 这个题目的问题是:

教授:本周的课程资料将集中讨论科学发现。虽然科学研究人员通常更愿意与其他科学家分享他们的学习成果,但许多企业和政府却将某些科学发现保密。有人认为,所有的科学发现都应该在全球范围内的科学家之间自由分享,政府和企业不应该保留任何秘密。你持什么观点,为什么?

需要我们发表观点的是:Somepeople believe that all scientific discoveriesshould be shared freely among scientists allaround the world and that governments andbusinesses should not keep any discoveriessecret.

(3). 审题注意点:

1. All scientific discoveries:绝对,可以反驳,提出哪些发现不能分享。比如:军事核武器... 如果被恐怖分子等利用,整个世界的和平就会受到威胁。

需要分享的理由是:

① 加速科研的进步。比如新冠时期,很多科研发现都是第一时间在全世界内分享,加速了疫苗的研发和推广,拯救了全球数百万人的生命。

② 科学家们需要认可(=Paul)。

2. “governments and businesses should not keep any discoveries secret.-

题目会涉及到政府和公司主要因为:很多大公司都雇佣了世界上最顶尖的科学家来做研发产品。所以他们会掌握很多最先进的发明。比如Tsela 的电池。Google 的搜索。Apple 也掌握很多专利...或者国家也资助了很多科学家们的实验...

他们想保密的原因是:盈利;有资金再次投入到未来的科研,因为科研需要大笔资金。(=Kelly的观点)

对于这2个两难的困境,大家可以联系之前大火的电影《我不是药神》。

参考范文:

I align myself with Paul's perspective that scientific discoveries should be freely shared.The primary reason for my stance is the collective benefit to humanity that comes from open dissemination of scientific knowledge.

站队+总观点+分论点

For instance,consider the field of medical science, wheredeadly or highly contagiousdiseases like HIV, cancer, and COVID-19 are exceptionally complex and challenging.A lone scientist or a closed group cannot conquer these issues; international collaboration is essential.In recent years, we'vewitnessedthe positive impact of such openness: the rapid development and distribution of COVID-19 vaccines. Thanks to unselfish international collaboration, millions of vulnerable lives were saved.

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WhileI acknowledge the concerns of businesses and governments who invest heavily in research and expect significant returns,I argue that the value of human lives saved or improved by scientific breakthroughs should be the ultimate priority.Therefore, I firmly believe that all scientific discoveries should be freely shared among the global scientific community.

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