文书怎么写好开头?

如果说成绩单是反映学习能力的那么申请文书就是学生展现学生性格思想以及个人魅力的有力证据。

招生官看PS可能只花一两分钟,所以亮眼的文书开头非常重要。

好的开头怎么写?

机构为同学们推荐一个相当简单而实用的文书结构,Past-Present-Future(PPF),来帮助同学们构思文书。

从过去的经历开始写,比如可以写是什么让你对你所申请的专业感兴趣的。如果你是转专业的学生,也可以从你一开始的专业开始写。

接着你可以之后参加过的活动或者经历,以及这些经历如何让你对这个专业更加感兴趣,坚定了要申请的心。

最后以对自己未来的规划和你申请的项目将如何帮助你做结尾。

举个例子⬇

One morning during my sophomore year, I was teaching a social studies lesson in a tenth-gradeclassroom. During that lesson, I realized that the most meaningful part of my day was not relating facts about George Washington, but rather the discussion I had with a student whose father did not return home the previous night. She was devastated and was willing to confide in me. As I reflected on this experience, I began to realize that my true passion did not lie in the teaching of social studies but rather in my desire to assist people in overcoming obstacles and discovering light in otherwise dark areas.

作者通过过去的一个具体的经历描写了自己是如何发现social studies并不是自己的热情所在。

当然,也可以在开头描写一连串的事件以示这些事件是如何一点点积累坚定了你继续学习这个专业的决心。

例如⬇

My passion for research first became clear when I began working on an independent research project at Capital University concerning the presence of Genetic Modification within commercial corn products. The excitement of the investigation had me hooked. I later worked on a research project during a service-learningexperience in Panama; additionally, I studied at a Research Experience for Undergraduates at Iowa State University in Biotechnology and Genomics. This January I will conduct research on the coral reefs of Cozumel, Mexico. My various active research experiences have inspired me to obtain my Ph.D. in Geneticsfrom the University of Agora, and later to work as a Principal Investigating Scientist.

还有一种文书开头千万不要尝试!

因为我家开公司,所以我想学习商科;

因为我父母做金融,所以我想学习金融...

这些小故事,招生官已经看过太多太多了!我们需要的是真的细节化的,有力量的经历。

文书思路有了,怎么改?

有很多同学冥思苦想,好不容易写好了文书,自以为十拿九稳,却被招生官一秒Pass...

案例一:陈词滥调,过于普通

文书修改前

Since I was a child,I have always been passionateabout computer science and I dream of studying inthe United States to fulfill my dreams.

问题所在:

这个开头陈词滥调,且表述过于直接。描述童年时期的热情和梦想是一个非常老套的开头,缺乏独创性。

机构导师修改后:

As I sat in front of the flickering computer screen, hands trembling with a mix of nerves and excitement, I knew that the world of computer science had captivated me. Debugging my first program at the age of twelve, I discovered the power of transformingabstract ideas into tangible results, igniting mypassion for technology and fueling my desire to delvedeeper into this ever-evolving field.

总结:

这个开头更具吸引力,成功展示了作者对计算机科学的热情以及探筹这一领域的动力,为招生官提供了一个独特的视角,

案例二:无个人特点,过于直接

文书修改前

I am applying to the Master's program in Computer Science at your prestigious university because it is the best in the field.

问题所在:

过于直接地提到了申请原团,没有展示申请者的个人特点。它仅仅强调了大学的声誉而没有说明申请者对该专业的独特兴趣和经历。

机构导师修改后:

Immersing myself in cutting-edge research and innovative projects at your esteemed university would not only challenge my intellectual curiosity but also propel me toward my goal of becoming a trailblazer in the realm of computer science.

总结:表达了申请者在计算机科学领域的抱员,使招生官对申请者的职业目标和动力有了更清晰的了解。

案例三:自我介绍,过于简单

文书修改前

My name is John Doe, and lam a recent graduate witha Bachelor's degree in Computer Science from XYZUniversity.

问题所在:

文书主要以自我介绍为主,信息过于简单且与申请者的个人陈述没有紧密联系。开头部分应该吸引读者的兴趣而不仅仅是提供基本信息。

机构导师修改后:

Graduating with a Bachelor's degree in ComputerScience from XYZ University, I found myself standingat a crossroads, eager to contribute my expertise andmake a tangible impact in the ever-evolving world oftechnology.

总结:

修改后避免了简单的自我介绍,而是通过阐述动机和目标吸引了招生官的注意力。

案例四:缺乏创意,不吸引人

文书修改前

In this Personal Statement,I will discuss myeducational background, work experiences, andfuture goals.

问题所在:

开头只是简单地概述了文章的内容,没有为读者提供任何引人入胜的故事或观点。缺乏创意,不足以吸招生官。

机构导师修改后:

Embarking on a journey through my academic achievements, professional endeavors, and aspirations,I invite you to explore the driving forcesthat have shaped my passion for computer scienceand my vision for the future future.

总结:

该开头展示了申请者对计算机科学领域的热情,以及对未来的展望,使文章更具吸引力。

文书写作要点总结

敲黑板!最后再为大家总结一下文书写作要点,供大家参考。

与所申请专业相关

确保开头与所申请的专业或领域有关联。通过讲述与所申请领域相关的经历或思考,使招生官相信你对该领域有浓厚的兴趣和独特的见解。

突出个人特点

在开头中展示个性、价值观或特长,让招生官了解您的独特之处。同时,要确保这些特点与学术和职业目标相一致。

简洁明了

保持开头简洁明了,避免使用过于复杂的句子结构。要确保观点能够迅速传达给读者。

避免陈词滥调

尽量避免使用过于普遍的表达,以免让招生官觉得文章缺乏独创性。用新颖的角度和有趣的例子来展示咱的观点。

自然流畅

确保开头与接下来的文章内容自然衔接,让读者能够轻松地进入故事。避免在开头设置过于突兀的转折,导致文章结构不稳定。

留学申请中最让人头疼的部分之一就是文书~

万事开头难,同学们不要对文书有抵触心理,更不要害怕文书。

现在就动笔,抓紧时间反复修改润色,尽全力写出精彩地属于自己的篇章。

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