雅思大作文7分范文及解析：成功的要素是什么

双边类大作文，社会类话题

Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination, but others think there are more important factors like money and appearance. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

题目来源：2014年2月15日大陆雅思大作文

1、题目大意

有人认为人生成功来自努力工作和坚持；其他人认为人生更重要的是金钱和外表。讨论双边观点，并给出你的观点。

2、思路解析

这是一道双边类大作文，聊的是人生成功的要素，双边类大作文，需要对每个观点分别表达同意或反对，最终的结论就是我的立场，可以是中立（双方都同意或都反对），也可以是单边支持某一方立场。审题时需要注意两点，一是“success in life”是一个抽象的概念，因此在论证时可以先定义“什么是成功”；二是两方观点并不矛盾，因此可以采取中立观点，在论证中可以分类讨论各自的合理性。下面，月半鸭和大家一起来看下具体观点。

首先来看前者观点的合理性，可以有两方面。

一方面成功往往源于长期的坚持和努力。像科学家、艺术家或企业家，他们在达到成功之前，往往经过长期的学习、研究和工作。即便是那些成功人士拥有令人羡慕的财富，获取过程中很可能也需要坚韧不拔的品质，强烈的职业道德和面对困境的韧性。

另一方面努力工作和坚定的决心是我们可以控制的因素，自身样貌和家里的财富很大程度上是我们无法决定的，但是我们依然可以通过增加努力量或提升自己的毅力来提高成功的可能性，特别是面对困难的处境时，这对于达到目标是至关重要的。

再来看后者的合理性，同样有两点。

一是金钱可以提供更多的机会和资源。如获得更好的教育、接触更多的人脉和机会，这些都可能直接或间接导致成功。同时在我们的社会中，人们常常以貌取人，外貌好的人更容易给人留下良好的印象，获得更多的机会。

二是在某些领域，如娱乐业或模特行业，外貌更会被认为是成功的关键之一，无论是男性还是女性，拥有出色的外貌有更多机会获得曝光和资源，也更容易吸引到观众，让自己的事业获得成功。

3、提纲

4、高分范文示例

While some individuals extol the virtues of industrious work and unwavering resolve as the primary vehicles towards achieving personal milestones, others hold fast to the allure of material possessions and aesthetic appeal. This dichotomy, as it appears to me, fails to encapsulate the entirety of the human experience, thus rendering it overly simplistic to exalt one perspective over the other without a thorough examination of all influencing factors.

The presumption that industry and determination solely pave the road to professional success is, in my view, a reductionist approach. Certainly, this sentiment is deeply rooted within the psyche of the less privileged, who often rely on these attributes as their primary tools for aspiration and advancement. However, this perspective neglects the unique concerns of those residing within the affluent echelons of society, many of whom are not burdened with the same fears over basic sustenance or the pressing need to fulfill lifelong ambitions. Consequently, it is unreasonable to anticipate that individuals blessed with prosperity would share the same values or perspective as those grappling with the dual stressors of sustenance and career progression.

Yet, the fact that those of a higher socioeconomic status may not value hard work as highly does not automatically elevate the importance of wealth and physical appearance above other qualities. The crux of this debate lies in the nebulous nature of the term 'more important' – a descriptor that resists a universally accepted definition and instead finds its true meaning within specific domains and contexts. While personal wealth and physical attractiveness undeniably act as significant metrics for securing a coveted spot in the Forbes list, a closer examination of the narratives beneath the glossy magazine covers reveals the enduring presence of traditional values at the core of these success stories – values such as tenacity, a strong work ethic, and resilience in the face of adversity.

In synthesis, it is my assertion that any attempt to overemphasize the role of either hard work or materialism, while disregarding contextual factors, results in an oversimplified and myopic understanding of human motivations and success.

5、相关词汇和语法结构

Aesthetic appeal   审美吸引力

Deeply rooted   深深植根

Unwavering resolve   坚定的决心

Primary vehicles   主要手段

Overly simplistic   过于简单化

Thorough examination   彻底检查

Dual stressors   双重压力

Socioeconomic status   社会经济地位

Nebulous nature   模糊的性质

Enduring presence   持久的存在

Strong work ethic   强烈的职业道德

Resilience in the face of adversity   面对逆境的韧性

Overemphasize the role   过分强调角色

Oversimplified and myopic   过于简化和短视

Human motivations   人类动机

Professional success   职业成功

Personal milestones   个人里程碑