加州理工学院校园规模小、学生人数仅有两千多，却诞生了73位诺贝尔奖获得者，被誉为世界上最顶尖的理工院校之一。想要加入这样一所顶尖的理工院校，不仅需要有高分和标准化考试成绩，还需要强有力的写作来支撑。
到底什么样的文书才是招生官想看到的呢？招生官眼里的好文书是什么样的呢？今天，我们就来一起看看Catch的“5篇优秀范文”。
01加州理工学院新生范文
英文原文
Even though many of my family members live thousands of miles apart from each other, we have done everything from sharing knock-knock jokes to talking about a movie we just watched. Just as our love for one another connects us, our genes do as well. Alhough many traits that show up in these genes are desirable, there are many undesirable traits as well, including a high predisposition to cancer.
Cancer has afiected the lives of many of my relatives across generations on both sides ofmy family. It seemed that with every year came a new diagnosis. However, the fear that accompanied my realization of our genetic proneness to cancer quickly tumed into curiosity, and then a fuel for my passion of researching better and more effective treatments for this merciless disease.
Having cancer run through my family means that I have first-hand experience of the effect a diagnosis can have on a patient's family, When my aunt was diagnosed with advanced stage breast cancer, I leamed that chemotherapy and radiation is grueling and painful for a patient and their family. The nausea, vomiting, fatigue, and anemia appalled me. How could this treatment be the only option? With nearly two million diagnoses in 2018, that meant a lot of chemotherapy and pain. This realization pushed me to look further into altemative forms of treatment.
After some searching, I came across the term “immunotherapy," which used the power of the human body's immune system to kill cancer cells. This type of treatment caught my interest, as it addressed the use of genetics in medical treatment. My familial background of cancer has led me to want to help solve the problem of finding better treatment options for cancer in the form ofimmunotherapy, which I will explore in an intemship this fall at UC San Diego. In the fiuture, I would like to research the effects of immunotherapeutic treatment of cancer, to see ifour immune system can beat this disease.
At Caltech, I will share my family's story to inspire my peers as they spend long hours conducting research and studying biochemical pathways. My family's story will remind them that their inventions and discoveries will have a direct impact on ordinary people who know nothing about genomes or thermodynamics. Together, my peers and l can find more efiective treatments and solutions so that next generations can not just survive, but thrive.
中文翻译
尽管我的许多家庭成员相隔千里，但我们仍会分享敲门笑话，谈论刚刚看完的电影。就像我们对彼此的爱把我们联系在一起一样，我们的基因也是如此。尽管这些基因中显示的许多特征是可取的，但也有许多不可取的特征，其中包括对癌症的高度易感性。
癌症影响了我家族两代人中许多亲戚的生命。似乎每年都有新的诊断结果。然而，当我意识到我们的癌症遗传倾向时，恐惧感迅速转化为好奇心，继而激发了我研究更好、更有效治疗这种无情疾病的热情。
当我的姨妈被诊断出患有晚期乳腺癌时，我了解到化疗和放疗对病人和他们的家庭来说是艰苦和痛苦的。恶心、呕吐、疲劳和贫血让我感到震惊。这种治疗怎么可能是唯一的选择？2018 年有近 200 万例诊断结果，这意味着大量的化疗和痛苦。这种认识促使我进一步研究其他治疗方式。
经过一番搜索，我发现了 "免疫疗法 "这个词，它利用人体免疫系统的力量来杀死癌细胞。这种疗法引起了我的兴趣，因为它解决了遗传学在医学治疗中的应用问题。我的癌症家族背景促使我希望通过免疫疗法帮助解决癌症治疗的难题，今年秋天我将在加州大学圣地亚哥分校的一个实习项目中探索这一问题。未来，我想研究免疫疗法治疗癌症的效果，看看我们的免疫系统能否战胜这种疾病。
在加州理工学院，我将分享我的家庭故事，以激励我的同龄人，因为他们要花很长时间进行研究和学习生化途径。我家的故事将提醒他们，他们的发明和发现将对那些对基因组或热力学一无所知的普通人产生直接影响。我和我的同龄人可以一起找到更有效的治疗方法和解决方案，让下一代不仅能够生存，而且能够茁壮成长。
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02加州理工学院新生范文
英文原文
The lights dim. The smell from today’s lunch (pizza) is still present. The spotlight nearly blinds me. Everyone just thinks I’m a nerd. I am. Everyone sees me as the kid with the perfect SAT score who takes too many AP science classes. In class, I’m often shy because I know that some of my classmates misunderstand me. But what they don’t know is that when I get home, I prepare for my secret life as a standup comedian.Every Friday afternoon, our school has an open mic in the cafeteria. Most students sing, play “cool” instruments like guitar and drums, or perform small skits. When I get on the stage for the first time ever, no one knows what I’m about to do. Roberto isn’t in choir, they think. He doesn’t play an instrument in the band, they think. He isn’t an actor, they think. I take a deep breath and wait.
While many of my classmates take private lessons to pursue their arts, my parents don’t have the same resources, so I watch video clips of my favorite comedians online: Ali Wong, Michelle Buteau, Jared Goldstein, Hannibal Buress, and Donald Glover. Sometimes I even take an hour-long bus to downtown Los Angeles to see the up-and- coming comics. My jokes are usually about growing up Guatemalan American in a rich suburb that is predominantly white, so seeing how comics in Los Angeles navigate the country’s diversity fuels my own work.
I stare at my classmates and take a breath. “So my sister’s boyfriend is white and doesn’t speak Spanish well,” I pause. “But we love him anyway,” I say, with some sass that surprises the entire room. I deliver joke after joke, some of them landing so well that the entire room erupts in laughter. Others flop, and that’s okay too.As I get off the stage, everyone applauds and whistles. I might be a nerd, but I also have a voice.
My friends and I watched as our code spun out of control, crashing the computer in front of our AP Computer Science teacher. We all laughed uncomfortably, knowing that we’d forgotten to close one of our loops. When we began to debug the code for our final AP Computer Science project, we realized that someone had made a mistake with an “if” statement, causing our code to go on forever.
Coding on a team is equally exciting and challenging. The larger the project, the more component parts there are. When there are more component parts, one can’t simply act alone. A group of individuals must work together to build the smaller parts, and finally, as a team, put them together. If one piece is missing, the entire project fails. Because this was the first time any of us had crashed a computer, we all learned to be more cautious moving forward.
At Caltech, I want to struggle through code with my peers. I am especially interested in working on projects with CAST (Center for Autonomous Systems and Technologies). Through a project with CAST, I could work with a team that includes experts in computer science and mechanical engineering, bridging the gap between software and hardware. I have always been interested in drones, robots, and other gizmos. However, I am eager to become part of the team that creates the software to control them, which requires a deep understanding of how coding languages can be used in tandem with complex machines.
My peers in Mechanical Engineering and robotics will help me understand how their contraptions work, while I will offer insight on how coding languages can be used to help their machines perform surgery, travel across the Pacific Ocean, take videos of Pasadena from sky, deliver packages to soldiers in remote areas, or assist forest rangers in finding a lost hiker. The possibilities are endless.
中文翻译
灯光昏暗。今天午餐（披萨）的味道还在。聚光灯几乎刺瞎了我的双眼。大家都觉得我是个书呆子。我确实是个书呆子。在大家眼中，我是一个 SAT 满分的孩子，上了太多的 AP 科学课。在课堂上，我常常很害羞，因为我知道有些同学会误解我。但他们不知道的是，回到家后，我就开始为我的段子手秘密生活做准备。每周五下午，我们学校都会在食堂举办麦克风公开赛。大多数学生都会唱歌、演奏吉他和鼓等 "酷 "乐器，或者表演小品。当我第一次站上舞台时，没人知道我要表演什么。他们认为罗伯托没有参加唱诗班。他们认为罗伯托不在乐队里演奏乐器。他们认为他不是演员。我深吸一口气，等待着。
我的很多同学都会去上私人课程来追求他们的艺术，而我的父母却没有这样的资源，所以我在网上观看我最喜欢的喜剧演员的视频剪辑：阿里·王、米歇尔·布托、贾里德·戈尔茨坦、汉尼拔·布雷斯和唐纳德·格洛弗。有时，我甚至会坐一个小时的公交车到洛杉矶市中心去看那些崭露头角的喜剧演员。我的笑话通常是关于在白人占多数的富裕郊区长大的危地马拉裔美国人，因此，看到洛杉矶的喜剧演员如何驾驭这个国家的多样性，对我自己的创作有很大帮助。
我盯着我的同学，深吸了一口气。"我姐姐的男朋友是个白人，西班牙语说得不好，"我停顿了一下。"但我们还是爱他，"我傲慢地说，让全场惊讶。我讲了一个又一个笑话，有些笑话讲得很好，全场爆发出笑声。当我下台时，所有人都鼓掌并吹口哨。我可能是个书呆子，但我也有自己的声音。
我和我的朋友们看着我们的代码失控，当着我们的计算机科学预修课程老师的面把电脑弄坏了。我们都不自在地笑了起来，因为我们知道自己忘了关闭其中一个循环。当我们开始调试 AP 计算机科学结业项目的代码时，才发现有人在 "if "语句上犯了错误，导致我们的代码永远写不完。
在团队中编码同样令人兴奋和充满挑战。项目越大，组成部分就越多。当组成部分越多，一个人就不能单独行动。一群人必须齐心协力构建小部件，最后作为一个团队将它们组装在一起。如果少了一个部分，整个项目就会失败。因为这是我们中的任何一个人第一次弄坏电脑，所以我们都学会了在前进的道路上更加谨慎。
在加州理工学院，我想和我的同龄人一起努力学习代码。我对与CAST（自主系统与技术中心）合作的项目特别感兴趣。通过CAST的项目，我可以与包括计算机科学和机械工程专家在内的团队合作，在软件和硬件之间架起一座桥梁。我一直对无人机、机器人和其他小玩意儿很感兴趣。然而，我渴望成为创建控制它们的软件的团队的一员，这需要深入了解如何将编码语言与复杂的机器结合起来使用。
我的机械工程和机器人同行们会帮助我了解他们的装置是如何工作的，而我则会就如何使用编码语言帮助他们的机器进行手术、穿越太平洋、从空中拍摄帕萨迪纳市的视频、为偏远地区的士兵运送包裹，或者协助护林员寻找迷路的远足者等问题提出自己的见解。可能性是无限的。
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03加州理工学院新生范文
英文原文
In my ROP Manufacturing Engineering Technology Course, I’m learning about the application of math in manufacturing. We’ve worked on isometrics, including drawing the different views of a 3D object and solving the missing dimensions. Now, I’ve begun learning g-code for CNC mill programming: first linear interpolation then circular interpolation. I’ve loved thinking through what a machine would do step by step, and I feel great accomplishment when my program finally runs correctly. I wrote a program to carve out my own design of a camera with a heart in the lens. Currently, I’m learning Mastercam CAD/CAM software. I can’t wait to take the Advanced course in the Spring semester to further pursue engineering fundamentals.
At the Biotechnology Open House at Santiago Canyon College, I participated in gel electrophoresis, separating red, blue, and purple dyes by running current through the gel with the buffer solution. The purple dye separated into two bands of blue and red. Observing that the red moved farther than the blue, I concluded that the molecules were smaller and moved through the gel quicker. After learning that electrophoresis is even used to separate DNA, I had the opportunity to extract DNA from my cheek cells. I was amazed to see my own genetic blueprint in a tube! These experiments excited me to learn more about how biology and engineering can create pharmaceutical, diagnostic, and environmental products to benefit society.
In honors physics, our lab groups competed to get the highest power output from wind turbines. Our group won through experiment and iteration, changing resistors from parallel to series (surprisingly, the least resistance doesn’t yield the highest power!) and switching the number, angles, and shapes of blades. In the future, I want to work to create more efficient blades on wind turbines to create more energy with the least amount of wind speed possible. As an engineer, I’ll need to understand the foundations of green energy to learn ways of improving renewable systems. I am enthralled by the promise of a carbon-free world.
中文翻译
在我的 ROP 制造工程技术课程中，我正在学习数学在制造中的应用。我们已经学习了等距测量，包括绘制三维物体的不同视图和解决缺失尺寸的问题。现在，我开始学习数控铣编程的 g 代码：首先是线性插值，然后是圆弧插补。我喜欢一步一步地思考机器会做什么，当我的程序最终正确运行时，我感到非常有成就感。我编写了一个程序，雕刻出我自己设计的镜头中有一颗心的照相机。目前，我正在学习 Mastercam CAD/CAM 软件。我迫不及待地想在春季学期选修高级课程，进一步学习工程基础知识。
在圣地亚哥峡谷学院的生物技术开放日上，我参加了凝胶电泳，通过缓冲溶液在凝胶中通电，分离红色、蓝色和紫色染料。紫色染料分离成蓝色和红色两条带。观察到红色比蓝色移动得更远，我得出结论：分子更小，在凝胶中移动得更快。了解到电泳甚至可以用来分离 DNA 后，我有机会从我的脸颊细胞中提取 DNA。在试管中看到自己的基因蓝图，我感到非常惊讶！这些实验让我兴奋不已，我想更多地了解生物学和工程学如何创造出制药、诊断和环保产品来造福社会。
在荣誉物理课上，我们的实验小组争夺风力涡轮机的最高功率输出。我们小组通过实验和反复修改，将电阻从并联改为串联（令人惊讶的是，最小的电阻并不能产生最大的功率！），并改变叶片的数量、角度和形状，最终赢得了比赛。未来，我想努力在风力涡轮机上制造更高效的叶片，以尽可能小的风速产生更多的能量。作为一名工程师，我需要了解绿色能源的基础，学习改进可再生能源系统的方法。我对无碳世界的前景充满信心。
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04加州理工学院新生范文
英文原文
Why are Siri, Alexa, Cortana, and Google Assistant all female? Because women are often just seen as “assistants”. Society has made some progress, but women still make up only 25 percent of STEM workers.
Last year I was chosen as my school’s delegate to California Girls State. Among other things, the program brought to light to me how big the gender gap really is. Women are underrepresented at every level in STEM--and the higher you go, the greater the gap. Like myself, many of the other delegates are pursuing careers in STEM, and we helped each other understand the importance of having a supportive community of intelligent, empowered young women.
Inspired by Girls State, I’ve become more proactive in my school and community. As Vice President of the Angel Heart Club this year, I’ve worked to recruit new members, helped organize and run meetings, and guided others on how to craft the cards we make to send to children with congenital heart disease in China. I also continue to volunteer at the hospital, helping to discharge patients, deliver food, and transport x-rays from radiology to the ER. But since Girls State, I’ve begun to take greater initiative, volunteering to cover other people’s shifts and taking on tasks that others are reluctant to, like running the tea cart to support nurses and doctors.
At Caltech, I would like to join Women in Physics, Math and Astronomy (WiPMA), which offers a similar supportive community. There, I will listen and interact with female scientist guest speakers, and build confidence and skills alongside my female peers. I hope to join Engineers Without Borders because I am interested in designing and implementing sustainable engineering projects. After working with the H20 for Life Club, I am aware of the global water crisis and would love to get involved in the current project of establishing a spring water source protection system that will help provide clean water for about 300 households in the surrounding Ilam District of Nepal.
I would also like to get involved in Caltech Chemistry Club, demonstrating my love of chemistry and inspiring young children about the wonders of science. I would also like to listen to faculty members discuss career options in the field of chemistry and the yearly guest speaker talk about current innovative chemical research.
I want to be the boss, not just an assistant. I believe Caltech can help.
中文翻译
为什么 Siri、Alexa、Cortana 和 Google Assistant 都是女性？因为女性通常只被视为 "助手"。社会已经取得了一些进步，但女性仍然只占 STEM 工作人员的 25%。
去年，我被选为学校的代表，参加了加州女子州立大学（California Girls State）的活动。除其他外，这个项目让我了解到性别差距到底有多大。在 STEM 的各个层面，女性的比例都很低，而且越往上，差距就越大。和我一样，许多其他代表也在从事 STEM 行业，我们互相帮助，明白了拥有一个由聪明、有能力的年轻女性组成的支持性社区的重要性。
受 "女孩国度 "活动的启发，我在学校和社区中变得更加积极主动。今年，作为天使之心俱乐部的副主席，我努力招募新成员，帮助组织和管理会议，并指导其他人如何制作我们为中国先天性心脏病儿童制作的卡片。我还继续在医院做志愿者，帮助病人出院、送食物、将 X 光片从放射科运送到急诊室。但自从参加了 "女孩国度 "项目后，我开始变得更加主动，我自愿替别人值班，承担别人不愿意承担的任务，比如推茶水车为护士和医生提供帮助。
在加州理工学院，我想加入 "物理、数学和天文学女性"（Women in Physics, Math and Astronomy，WiPMA），它提供了一个类似的支持性社区。在那里，我将聆听女科学家的演讲并与之互动，与女性同龄人一起建立自信、培养技能。我希望加入工程师无国界组织，因为我对设计和实施可持续工程项目很感兴趣。在与 "生命之水 "俱乐部合作后，我意识到了全球水危机，并希望参与到当前建立泉水源保护系统的项目中，该系统将帮助为尼泊尔伊拉姆地区周边约 300 户家庭提供清洁水源。
我还想参加加州理工学院化学俱乐部的活动，展示我对化学的热爱，并启发孩子们了解科学的奥妙。我还想聆听教职员工讨论化学领域的职业选择，聆听年度特邀演讲人讲述当前的创新化学研究。
我想成为老板，而不仅仅是助理。我相信加州理工学院可以帮助我。
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05加州理工学院新生范文
英文原文
A stack of 146 comic books sit in my closet, the oldest one dating back to the ‘80s while the most recent issue was released a month ago. I’ve been on my Marvel comic collecting journey since I was 12, drawn in by the intriguing writing of Stan Lee and Brian Michael Bendis and the eye-popping art of Jack Kirby and Alex Ross. Usually after finishing hours of homework, I dig through my smorgasbord of books and pick out one that I’m in the mood for. Should I reread the Civil War storyline? Nah, too political; I’ll have to rant to my friends for the 99th time in a row about how Iron Man’s stupid mistake of trusting Miriam Sharpe cost the whole superhero community’s reputation . What about Kraven’s Last Hunt? I’m too tired to cry now. Daredevil: Man Without Fear? Perfect.
No matter whether I’m scanning pages of Uncanny X-Men #467 or reveling in Amazing Spider-Man: If This Be Destiny...! under the light of my desk lamp, the thrilling sensation of being pulled into each panel and waiting for the upcoming punch or roundhouse kick is unbeatable. Yet beyond the stories and wacky characters, comics are a platform of progressivism, illustrating how no matter what race, gender, or religion one believes in, anyone can be a superhero.
Though I might not have the marvelous singing skills of the X-men’s Dazzler, I definitely shred the ukulele better than she does. Music has been a large part of my life, and playing the ukulele has always brought me joy. This 2 foot long, 1 foot wide instrument has captivated me ever since my cousin gifted me one for my 8th birthday; its four strings of A, E, C, and G fabricate up to 220 (12choose3) different 3-note chords when thrummed with the correct fingering. While I do perform at my school’s coffeehouses and strum pop songs for my friends and me to sing along to together, I mostly play for myself, learning from YouTube tutorials and sometimes writing my own music.
I often find myself sitting on my bed plucking out tunes; occasionally I’ll strum “Hey, Soul Sister” after a heart-warming dinner with my family, bust out “Riptide” after a night-out with friends, or “Hey There Delilah” after a rather stressful school day. Maybe the next new song I’ll learn is “Hail CIT”.
中文翻译
我的衣柜里放着一摞 146 本漫画书，最老的一本可以追溯到 80 年代，而最近的一本是一个月前发行的。我从 12 岁起就开始了漫威漫画收藏之旅，斯坦-李和布莱恩-迈克尔-本迪斯引人入胜的文笔以及杰克-柯比和亚历克斯-罗斯令人瞠目结舌的画作吸引了我。通常在做完几个小时的家庭作业后，我会翻翻我的大杂烩，挑一本我有兴致的书。我应该重读《内战》的故事情节吗？不，太政治化了；我得连续 99 次向我的朋友们咆哮钢铁侠信任米里亚姆-夏普的愚蠢错误是如何让整个超级英雄界声誉扫地的......"。那《克拉文的最后狩猎》呢？我现在累得哭不出来了。敢死队 无畏者？太完美了。
无论我是在《不思议 X 战警》（Uncanny X-Men #467）中翻阅，还是在台灯下陶醉于《超凡蜘蛛侠：如果这是命运......！》（Amazing Spider-Man: If This Be Destiny...! 然而，除了故事和古怪的角色，漫画还是一个进步主义的平台，它说明了无论种族、性别或宗教信仰如何，任何人都可以成为超级英雄。
虽然我可能没有《X 战警》中的炫目女星那样出神入化的歌喉，但我的尤克里里弹得绝对比她好。音乐一直是我生活的重要组成部分，而演奏尤克里里一直给我带来快乐。自从表姐在我 8 岁生日时送给我一把四弦琴后，这把 2 英尺长、1 英尺宽的乐器就深深地吸引了我；它的四根弦分别是 A、E、C 和 G，用正确的指法弹奏时，可以组成多达 220 个（12 选 3）不同的 3 音和弦。虽然我也会在学校的咖啡馆表演，弹奏流行歌曲让我和朋友们一起唱，但我主要是自己弹，从 YouTube 上的教程中学习，有时也自己写音乐。
我经常发现自己坐在床上弹奏曲子；偶尔在与家人共进暖心的晚餐后，我会弹奏 "嘿，灵魂姐妹"；在与朋友夜游后，我会弹奏 "激流勇进"；在紧张的学习生活后，我会弹奏 "嘿，黛利拉"。也许我下一首要学的新歌是 "Hail CIT"。
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